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Newport Will Never Be the Same - Feedback « Thread Started on Jul 2, 2008, 1:17pm »
First of all, please forgive this hideous, 1,000+ page monstrosity. I was fresh and green, right off the farm when I first wrote this, new to fan fiction. That's my only excuse, and it's not even a very good one. BUT, if you feel so inclined to read this story anyway, post all feedback for Newport Will Never Be the Same in this thread, please. Thank you... and I'm sorry.
Re: Newport Will Never Be the Same - Feedback « Reply #1 on Jul 29, 2008, 6:52pm »
Well i decided to read to finish it. I started reading but it was long was all over the place, remember a place called the oc board.... so it was even longer there. I admit i jumped most of the "info" you gave us, untill u started writing in the "usual" way.
I liked a lot of things on this, i mean for a "virgin" the plot was thick but towards the end, i didn't like you skipped it, it would have been interesting to see how everything came down. I wanted to see Caleb getting more soft and even handling the NWG to Ryan.
I admit that this Marissa seems a lot of "self -prjection of yourself" anyway nice work.